Moriah Leila

A poem that turns snow into something evil and deadly, I bow down before you. It is so original, I must give you praise! So I am guessing that the ...

Very cool and obviously original since I have no idea who Nyx is. However, I want more. From what the others have said, I sense that Nyx is a morbid, ...

I can't say I enjoyed this poem too much, but maybe that is because I voted for McCain! Either way, I have only a few nitpicks. The first is pretty ...

I totally agree with you about the power of writing. I think the idea behind this poem is solid, I just felt like it came across more as an argument ...

I really enjoyed this poem, I thought it was funny, in a morbid sort of way. I liked the creative way that everyone died, and I really thought it was ...

I like the poem as a whole, although I was a bit confused towards the end. How does one suck up their cheeks? And to what purpose does this action ...

I really like the idea of this poem, it is very original. Not too many people imagine what it will be like to be buried, so it is an interesting ...

Hmm, I am trying to grasp what you meant by weightless-ness. Do you feel weightless when you're watching squirrels? To me it seems you are describing the appreciation of those ...

If you want the last word of each line to be the beginning of the next, you should probably punctuate it as such. After all, punctuation in poetry is just ...

Ha ha, good job on making everything rhyme. There were even some lines that made a little bit of sense, which was like a word search. This was a fun ...

Hmm, I like the idea here. You are certainly bringing something new to love poetry genre. I just wish you would delve a little deeper. I don't necessarily like the ...

Conrad is completely right. It is a generic love poem and we want some imagery. Focus on all five senses. How does this person make the speaker feel when they ...

I think you use some pretty powerful imagery in this poem to describe the speaker's suicide. And while you are being quite original on the theme of death, I feel ...

Obviously you need to do spell and grammar check before you post anything on YWS. It makes everyone's lives so much easier and happier. While this poem was beautifully written ...

Ha ha ha ha! I love it! I am just like you, I actually hate poetry. Well, I don't mind reading it and I can even critique it. But if ...